Tanka is Japan's oldest poetry form. Traditionally a tanka has five lines with 5-7-5-7-7 syllables. In English some count syllables and some just have short-long-short-long-long lines. If you know haiku, you know half of a tanka. Unlike haiku, tanka encourage feelings and emotions. Here is the place to try out a new poetry form. Give and get feedback on your poems.
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This helps me a lot. I see what you want to do with the tanka. It is much clearer. Thank you!! Your help is appreciated. This is how I would like to be
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