Muscles and Teeth Starched jeans tooled leather belts bulls, silver horses and lone-star buckles Scuffed, pointy boots tan and yellow red and black buffed and...
Oscar, I always look forward to your poems and click on them right away to read and respond. The title of this poem is great. I didn't know what the poem was...
I like the economy of words, trying to create a tight set of images with the fewest words possible. You create a vivid image. I think the line "hang easy on...
papa listens to Don Giovanni in the dark caruso crackles under the needle the last ashes from papa’s luckys adding one more hole to the yellowed armchair a...
SOME NEW FOLKS: A few new members have, or soon will be joining this, the online version of Poetry Works Workshops. Some are members of a group that also...
David, I had to read this twice before I really got it. But boy, did I get it! This poem heads straight for the gut in an unforgettable way. What is said in...
NOTE FROM MODERATOR: To comment on these 4 short poems, please name the poem, then give your comment. Thanks. Going South Did you ever watch the sky Geese in...
June: I liked the great comparison of lack of sleep being elusive as the Loch Ness monster. I also liked the descriptions in the second stanza, particularly...
Hi David, glad to see you here. Great poem and powerful imagery. It makes me want to read it again and again and always left in my own imagination as to...
Hi David, I REALLY like this poem. It says a great deal in a few short lines and delineates the characters involved nicely. The repetition of the line: It's...
David, Very powerful emotions... very insightful to this mans personality and his families torment. A short poem that told about long years of abuse. They knew...
I like the title, however when I google Don Giovanni to see if it ties into this piece I was disappointed. That particular opera is more about seduction and...
Oscar, I like the changes made to stanza 4 by taking out "raise cattle" and "ride horses" to "rawboned horseman" and "herd cattle." These reflect more action...
Going South - good title, the poet might consider smoothing out the fourth line. Perhaps "To where it is they go" This seems to keep the rhythm of the first...
Thanks for your suggestions. [this is the final version] Muscles and Teeth starched jeans tooled leather belts bulls, silver horses and lone-star buckles ...
I really like this piece Oscar. It is very colloquial and the absolute refusal of pretense or attempt to "sound poetic" makes this a very good read; a very...
Mary, please post to see what others think of this new title. What do you think? A Satisfied Man She plays in the sand box busy as a two year old. Her...
Thanks for your comments, David. While as moderator, I occasionally post essays on poetic topics, everyone is welcome to post them as well. The more we share...
[The poet states that is a final version, which means the poem itself is no longer for critique, but is simply being shared with the group. The Moderator} ...
Oscar: Kudos for this poem! It makes use of many poetic tools, such as particularity of language, clear imagery, warmth of personality, sets the scene well,...
As the moderator of this group, I'm given automatic updates by the system. If you change your id, but don't let me know, and the system reports a bounce on...
From a list of topics (fruits & vegetables) created at Sunday's workshop. Desert Fruit He's sitting in the cupola of a Missouri Pacific caboose on the main...
Oscar - I like this poem and also prefer your new title. I would like to make a couple of suggestions which might strengthen it while retaining the subtlety....
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