Mountain-Home is a school of modern waka. Classical waka is the native poetry of Japan. For a thousand years, waka was the heart song of the Japanese people....
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This message is a reminder regarding the Mountain-Home policy on cross-posting. It is automatically sent to our community once a month. Poetry which you post...
Mountain-Home@yahoogr...
Apr 2, 2004 12:43 am
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Morning mists linger on the mountain side as I go to work tempting me with their magic, "Come, come to your real home." nt...
... Hi Nick, Since you just recently joined, I'd like to welcome you to Mountain-Home. This is pretty good. The third line pivot, however, doesn't work as well...
Here are the ones that came in for a starter verse for the spring sequence. Thanks to everyone for submitting. I will post the one I chose later today and get...
Here is the first link in the spring sequence. Please feel free to add links. If 2 links come in at about the same time, I will take the first one. For those...
Thank you for the comments, Donna. I've rethought the experience and tried to use a third line pivot. Would appreciate your thoughts on the result. Going to...
My apologies for posting a third version of this when I know those more advanced than I are busy starting a sequence. But I was unsatisfied with the ending of...
In a message dated 4/3/2004 6:12:25 AM Eastern Standard Time, ... Hi Nick, nice to be meeting you. Thank you for sharing. Being a rail commuter myself, I like...
... No need to apologize. This is a workshop and people post eventhough we may be doing a sequence. We practice a selflessness at Mountain-Home. So saying, "On...
I posted this message on Hokku-Inn and I thought I would give the link to those of you on Mountain-Home who might be interested. This discusses the change of...
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... You need a pause in this, Nick. I would suggest either a dash or a semi-colon at the end of line 3. Although the 3rd line pivot goes with both parts, there...
The still pond reflects only bare branches as winter passes-- will soft blossoms appear if only for a moment? Paul Emerging buds dot The weeping crabapple This...
Thank you, Donna. Yes, you're right. I'll put a semicolon after the third line. Am still not sure about how to work the punctuation with the pivot line. Do...
... I like this second one better. In the first version, you would need a comma after the subordinate clause in line 4 but you don't need punctuation when that...
Dear Paul, Thank you very much for your comments. My apologies for the delay in getting back to you. You are right that "watching" is not necessary, but I've...
The still pond reflects only bare branches as winter passes-- will soft blossoms appear if only for a moment? Paul Emerging buds dot The weeping crabapple This...
sorry if this is a double post. wasn't sure if it went through. bette. ... A starling's beak peaks out of overgrown grass a time to seek -- when the sun...
... I agree with you, Hortensia, on the inversion. "The fragile petals are pink" does sound a little less poetic. As far as the pivots go, that's no problem....
... Bette, The last part of this would read more smoothly with "It's a time to seek" which wouldn't change the meaning. You would need to change the...
In a message dated 4/5/2004 5:09:23 AM Eastern Standard Time, ... Nick, Thats the main thing, no? ~P [Non-text portions of this message have been removed]...
... Line 2 punctuation is fine. I would not put anything now after line 3. Donna ... ===== Mountain-Home Workshop Pages http://modwaka0.tripod.com Modern...
Donna, For some reason this last post, which I originally e-mailed at 9:35 this morning, did not come through so I have re-posted it directly at the website. ...
... Paul, The mail is getting a little slow. On this the only punctuation that you need is a comma after line 2 and possibly line 4. The first 2 lines are prep...
... Moonlight filters Through the frosted window Before a spring dawn; Will your finger tips trace The tree shadows on the sheet? Donna (If this is too...
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