Hi hortensia, A little sense of mystery with this one. I would suggest that you might want to change those last 2 lines into the active rather than the...
donna ferrell
dfer268@...
Aug 1, 2001 1:14 pm
1327
Hortensia, I love the mystery in this tanka! The last line "tripped" me a little.....but otherwise it is just perfectly beautiful! Maria ... From: donna...
Chameleon
chameleo@...
Aug 1, 2001 5:20 pm
1328
This message is a reminder regarding the Mountain-Home policy on cross-posting. It is automatically sent to our community once a month. Poetry which you post...
Mountain-Home@yahoogr...
Aug 1, 2001 5:58 pm
1329
Mountain-Home is a school of modern waka. Classical waka is the native poetry of Japan. For a thousand years, waka was the heart song of the Japanese people....
Mountain-Home@yahoogr...
Aug 1, 2001 5:58 pm
1330
Hi, George, I already considered putting the last two lines in question form. It is a good idea. I'll let this issue percolate for a while and see. Thanks for...
Shin02143@...
Aug 1, 2001 7:27 pm
1331
In a message dated 8/1/01 12:54:09 AM, you wrote: <<Lilies behind rocks where the stream disappears -- in late summer a hut in a willow grove is found out by...
Shin02143@...
Aug 1, 2001 7:39 pm
1332
In a message dated 8/1/01 12:59:39 AM, you wrote: <<feathery white clouds as snowy egrets on wing race across dark skies. luminous half moon, two stars, fiery...
Shin02143@...
Aug 1, 2001 7:48 pm
1333
Kit, Good suggestions! gassho, Richard In a message dated 8/1/01 1:50:08 AM, you wrote: <<Some striking images here. Waka's ability to depict beauty is one of...
Shin02143@...
Aug 1, 2001 7:49 pm
1334
In a message dated 8/1/01 1:59:57 PM, you wrote: <<we confess a particular fondness for the understated refinement of Saigyo and the other poets of the...
Shin02143@...
Aug 1, 2001 7:53 pm
1335
Every lunch-hour, sparrows flock for breadcrumbs outside the workplace; How can they be so certain we will always be here? George...
gsteelis@...
Aug 1, 2001 10:35 pm
1336
In a message dated 8/1/01 3:50:10 PM Eastern Daylight Time, Shin02143@... writes: << It is a wonderful image, has mystery. Thank you! >> Thanks, Rick, and...
nanacad@...
Aug 2, 2001 3:26 am
1337
Hi everybody: When responding to the emails that send our poems and commentary back and forth, can I hit "reply all" on the email screen and it will land here,...
nanacad@...
Aug 2, 2001 3:26 am
1338
A faint breeze stirs the chrome windchimes-- Silence; pale moonlight shimmers on the trembling pipes....
gsteelis@...
Aug 2, 2001 3:29 am
1339
Morning twilight; the ducks dark as shadows on lead-coloured water-- a mallard stretches his neck then settles slowly back down. George...
gsteelis@...
Aug 2, 2001 11:26 am
1340
Hi George, Another very subtle, delicate waka. This reminds me of the style of the late Court period. The writers let the emotion come from the delicacy of the...
donna ferrell
dfer268@...
Aug 2, 2001 12:43 pm
1341
In a message dated 8/1/01 11:31:04 PM, you wrote: <<A faint breeze stirs the chrome windchimes-- Silence; pale moonlight shimmers on the trembling pipes. >> ...
Shin02143@...
Aug 2, 2001 5:56 pm
1342
In a message dated 8/2/01 7:27:14 AM, you wrote: <<Morning twilight; the ducks dark as shadows on lead-coloured water-- a mallard stretches his neck then...
Shin02143@...
Aug 2, 2001 5:59 pm
1343
Deepening summer; If only my worries were So short-- The silent space Between cicadas' cries! Donna...
dfer268@...
Aug 2, 2001 6:55 pm
1344
Hi Donna Please forgive me I have been reading tanka all day and love the ones that the princes and princesses exchange. Deepening summer; If only my worries...
gsteelis@...
Aug 2, 2001 7:49 pm
1345
... . Avoid clutter. Be sparing with ... Kit, thanks for the advice. I would like to use this poem for working, demonstration/teaching for myself. When you say...
Claudia
nanacad@...
Aug 3, 2001 2:27 am
1346
As I have stated before there are waka that are more objective in tone. Some people talk about "extended hokku" but often what they are talking about is waka ...
donna ferrell
dfer268@...
Aug 3, 2001 2:39 am
1347
Thanks, George. Some of the wittiness in the exchanges is amazing. Donna ... __________________________________________________ Do You Yahoo!? Make...
donna ferrell
dfer268@...
Aug 3, 2001 2:42 am
1348
A midsummer's eve; brushing the sandcherry branch-- a beam of sunlight grows fainter and fainter as the sun quietly sets. George...
gsteelis@...
Aug 3, 2001 3:16 am
1349
George, I got home just a few minutes ago from teaching a crew of unambitious seniors so it took me a few minutes to clear my head. ... A bridge? Pluck the...
donna ferrell
dfer268@...
Aug 3, 2001 3:17 am
1350
Hi Donna the plot thickens :-) Deepening summer; If only my worries were So Short-- The silent space Between cicadas cries Donna the silent space between...
gsteelis@...
Aug 3, 2001 4:32 am
1351
hi Donna I like our foray into romantic? tanka. Several years ago I composed a poem In which I asssumed the persona of a young bride; Much like many of the old...
gsteelis@...
Aug 3, 2001 4:45 am
1352
This is interesting, George. Very nice imagery in it. Crossing gender lines in writing waka is a very interesting aspect of the genre. The masters did it so ...
donna ferrell
dfer268@...
Aug 3, 2001 1:05 pm
1353
Hi George, I have enjoyed this but am going to beg off since I have a very busy weekend and week planned. Donna ... ...
donna ferrell
dfer268@...
Aug 3, 2001 1:08 pm
1354
Hi Donna I find 4 verses were enough. I'm glad we did it though, it was really stimulating. I never stopped thinking of us as 2 medieval Japanese poets ...
gsteelis@...
Aug 3, 2001 4:11 pm
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Hot summer evening and a faint orange glow-- the green corn moon, whose mournful gibbous face shares my feelings of sadness. Comments? gassho, Richard...
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