Great descriptive sense in this story, Marlicia. Once gets a palpable feel
of the setting and the tension. Badara is very nearly the protagonist here.
Nicely done.

On Mon, Feb 13, 2012 at 2:05 PM, Marlicia Fernandez <setonmom@...>wrote:

> Hi all,
>
> Here's my take on the prompt: Write something with the title "Across the
> Chasm".
>
> I actually wrote it in another writing group as a continuation to another
> piece. I've posted the end of that first piece as a lead in.
>
> Thanks for taking a look.
>
> God bless,
> marlicia
> with God all things are possible
>
>
> *Lead in from “Haunted” (WC 87)*: *Foqil gripped his weapon. No bridge
> connected the trail with the town, and the road ended with a gate over a
> cliff. Still, there had to be a way. He pulled his hood over his head. The
> old man said it wouldn’t be easy, that even to begin Foqil would need faith
> and courage. Would he be strong enough to make the right decisions,
> whatever the cost? Foqil lifted his sword and urged Badara forward. The
> gate swung open. That’s what Foqil was going to find out.*
>
> *Across the Chasm*
>
> © Marlicia Fernandez 1-7-12 (WC 1081)
>
> Badara trembled and pranced, his sides heaving. He whinnied and tossed his
> head. Misty breath coated his nose and hung in the air. Foqil patted the
> side of the animal’s neck. “Easy, boy. Easy. It’s over. We’re over.”
> He twisted in the saddle and his stomach knotted. Not more than three
> yards separated them from the ravine. And yet he remembered little of the
> jump, except the beginning, a brief moment of flight and the landing. The
> heart-stopping leap across the canyon ended in an
> instant......................
>


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